发信人: JuliaFrank (小卡那), 信区: ANSI
标 题: 点评for percyshelley 第五章作业 by JuliaFrank
发信站: 日月光华 (2009年04月27日22:54:24 星期一), 站内信件
雪莱同学的进步太迅猛啦^^ 以我的水平来点评真是让我自惭形秽了。。。
这次作业中挺多的作品都在版面上讨论过,这里就不再赘述了。但有一点小小的建议,
是关于“,”、“`”等小字符的运用的。在“侠”字和侠版进版中,雪莱用这两个小字
符来作为了线条作品中的连接,但我个人觉得这样看上去比较累赘。
先说“侠”字中的。因为“,”和线条作品中一般使用的字符“|”“/”等的形状不同
,用于连接它们的时候就会显得突兀,所以是否可以考虑用留白来替代?
_ , ─
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╲
侠版进版中,箭的尖端用了“`”,个人觉得这样处理没什么必要,也可以用留白代替^^
╱
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╱╱
┗`
不过这些也都是小问题啦,雪莱作品的气场都很不错的~ 希望继续加油,我看好你哦^^
【 在 percyshelley (Can Spring Be Far Behind) 的大作中提到: 】
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: ╱ ╲ ╱_ \ ╱_\ ╱ _\ ╱ _\ \\ _ O-Э ﹜
: _╲\ ︱_╱ / _ ︱ / / / \ _ _ _ ゝ|| >い\ ̄/╲
: ╲_/ ▕/ ▕╱ \/ ╲_> \ ╲ \ ╲ \╲ \\ _ ク/ Y |_/ ̄\_ ︳
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Title: Review for percyshelley Chapter 5 Assignment by JuliaFrank
Sending site: Sun and Moon Guanghua Monday, April 27, 2009 22:54:24, site mail
Student Shelley's progress is so rapid^^ It really makes me feel ashamed to comment based on my level.
Many of the works in this assignment have been discussed on the page, so I won’t go into details here, but I have a few suggestions.
It is about the use of small characters such as "xia" and "xia" in the advanced version. Shelley uses these two small characters.
The symbols serve as connections in the line work, but I personally think it looks cumbersome.
Let’s talk about the character “xia” first because the shape of “xia” in the character “xia” is different from the characters generally used in line works.
When used to connect them, it will look awkward, so can we consider using white space instead?
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In the updated Xia version, the tip of the arrow is used. Personally, I don’t think it’s necessary to do this. You can also use a blank space instead^^
But these are all minor problems. The aura of Shelley's works is very good. I hope you will continue to work hard. I am optimistic about you^^
Mentioned in percyshelley Can Spring Be Far Behind's masterpiece:
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