发信人: Castellio (percyshelley|Right to Heresy), 信区: ANSI
标 题: Re: 点评 by daviddvd
发信站: 日月光华 (2009年10月22日14:58:02 星期四), 站内信件
稍稍做了修改,我现在实力不济,等待高手的修改。。。
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【 在 Castellio (percyshelley|Right to Heresy) 的大作中提到: 】
: 就是东西太多 字太多
: 【 在 hyuugayi (刘叔|独行|死而无憾了) 的大作中提到: 】
: : 除了这个竹子还有什么改进意见不。。。。
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Sender: Castellio percyshelley Right to Heresy, Area: ANSI
Title: Re: Review by daviddvd
Sending site: Sun and Moon Guanghua Thursday, October 22, 2009 14:58:02, site mail
I've made some slight modifications. I'm not strong enough now. I'm waiting for the experts to make modifications.
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In Castellio percyshelley Right to Heresy's masterpiece:
: There are just too many things and too many words.
: Mentioned in hyuugayi Liu Shu's masterpiece "Dying Alone with No Regrets":
: : In addition to this bamboo, are there any suggestions for improvement?
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